**Does my paper flow very well? I tend to have a problem with transitions.
**Is my claim clearly stated?
**Are there enough arguments for the supporting side of the issue? There were many more sources for arguments against it in some way or another.
**What can I add to make it a little bit longer?
**Is there anything I should change to make it more effective?
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In the second paragraph, try using some synonyms for "produce" as that verb is used 5 times and might help the flow of the paragraph. Also, clarify briefly the reasons people either support or do not support more production of E85, as it lets people know what is coming, and adds some length.
Your claim becomes more apparent by the end, as you explore both sides throughout the paper. Try going back with the conclusion you came to and inserting it in your initial paragraph.
At the beginning of the third page, you talk about ethanol production plants. We all know how oil is pumped from the ground, sent to refineries, then piped to gas stations. How is the ethanol harvested from corn? Why do we need natural gas or coal? Could add length to paper here, as well as helps inform the reader of the specific process of the corn-to-wheel trip.
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