Cohesion Exercise

“The use of E85 fuel and the production of its component ethanol has become an increasingly popular business in America. @[However], the production of the ethanol is not very energy-efficient. * For my next paper, I will write a proposal paper on what can be done to make the production of ethanol in America more energy efficient. @[I will accomplish this by first] explaining why the production process of E85 needs to be revised. @[Then] I will proceed to give an alternate plan and resources for making E85. @[Finally], I will use Brazil’s methods of producing ethanol to show that ethanol can be produced in an energy-efficient way. Brazil has developed a very efficient way of producing ethanol, using sugarcane and its byproducts, to make an ethanol-gasoline mixed fuel. @[Nevertheless], I need to find more sources on the actual production process of ethanol in Brazil and America in order to accurately make my proposal.”

This is my topic proposal, slightly revised. I used this in class for the cohesion exercise. It helped me add a few transitions to the paragraph and I also revised it some. The @[] is the cohesion, or transition, word used between the sentences to help it flow. The sentence after the * is the topic sentence. This exercise helped me revise this paragraph to make it better.